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Thousands of days later we met again in a small market out of no where

I was paying for gas,

And you were buying an ice cream cone for that little boy right next to you

He is about knee high, maybe four or five years old;

Standing on those tiny skates with the whole set of hockey helmets on,

Looks like a little warrior

He stared at me with curiosity and confidence,

I noticed his eyes were as beautiful as yours

I didn't see your wife,

But I saw the ring that had always given me nightmares



You smiled at me just like you used to

The look in your eyes still burned my cheeks

I could feel the heat on my face,

Flowing through every inch of my skin



The little guy pulled your arm and told you

He is going to be late for his practice



So I guess this is goodbye



You gave me a hug before you left,

I couldn't breath



It was so deep, so warm, and yet so frail

you used up all your strength but

There was still nothing to keep us close

Too much sorrow in your arms,

Just like many nights before

When we said goodbye



I looked at you two leaving until my sight is blurred, tears filled with my eyes



After I went home, I gave my sister a pair of tickets to Mexico

"When did you get these? They are almost expired! We have to go pretty soon!" She said

"Neh, you have to go with someone else. There is no point for me to go there anymore."

"But why did you even get those tickets the first place?"

"It was for an escape that was never going to happen." I smiled



Almost everything has expire date, even dreams and love

Except aching and sorrow, sometimes they grow with time



I will always be longing for you,

Even when you had vanished from my dreams
©2005-2009 ~laily
:iconlaily:

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- sorry this is another image that was downloaded a long time ago from deviantART and I edit with other image to fit this poem. again if you did not want me to use your image or would like me to credit your name, please let me know

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:iconairmega23:
Wow. I like this poem a lot. The feelings expressed here are so beautifully sad, that one cannot help but be drawn to the piece. I enjoyed the feeling of narration here, the storyline was fairly detailed for a poem, and that helped to create a feeling of reality to the poem. The events that took place were not overly dramatic, but their effect as a whole were powerful. Amazing
I would comment that I didnt like the flow so much. The double spacing, as well as the lack ofpuncuation did make the piece fairly hard to read in my opinion. However, I really did the like diction and the overall mood of the poem.

Greg

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To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important sacred or valuable...
To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]
:iconlaily:
I'm really appreciated your comment. I had to admit; since English wasn’t my first language it was not easy to find enough words to keep the flow smooth. I’m really glad that you like the story in the poem… and I’ll keep working on the punctuation of sentences. Thanks again!
:iconairmega23:
Wow. Now I am envious. English is my first and only language (save a bit of french), and you are quite talented at English as a second. I am amazed

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To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important sacred or valuable...
To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]
:iconfrankienexus:
omg
i have found another wonderful writer
what an amazing subtle deep story
so much here
god this is just
fantastic

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I love your comments and your textures
:iconlaily:
Thank you so much for your comment. I wish I could write like you though, words flow like river. :) But anyway, I'm really glad you like it!
:iconjerzchick16:
beautiful, strong, and very amazing.

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if i stop myself before loving again, am i stopping myself from the greater pain as well..or only causing more of it?

member of ~Deviant-Underground, *Circleoffriends, ~invisible-inc, *The-Red-Envelope, and =PoetryPlease
:iconlaily:
thank you so much for stopping by and i'm really glad you like it... :)

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.:Almost everything has expire date, even dreams and love
Except aching and sorrow, sometimes they grow with time:.
:iconscarofthefaith:
lovely poem and i love the amazing photo w/ it where did u get that great photo?? and all

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